looking at this now I realize that some of the text is sort of hard to read and that the blackened in areas are spotty and uneven. But once they're xeroxed it'll darken up and look better.
Now for the constructive criticism: I'd agree it would look better if the blacks were more solid. And the lettering has a few spots where it looks too obvious that you corrected something, like that really dark in "once" on page 6. Finally, how does fishface know Froggo's name when they say goodbye? Or is he just guessing? Anyhow, these are minor quibbles with another great story. Send these out and see about gettin' them published! You're on to something.
Thanks! and yeah the lettering will be gone over and fixed. As far as him knowing his name... uh... they've been standing in line for thousands of years? I think'll add a caption in the first panel on page 11 with somethign about them waiting for countless millenia or something. I never know how to work a characters name into the dialog and have it seem natural to me (if Froggo's name hadn't been in the title you wouldn't have known it until page 5).
Yeah, I think you really need a caption on that "Next please" panel on page 11, to say thousands of years had passed. I see now that it makes sense that a lot of time must've passed for them to get to the front of the line, but it just seemed like a few seconds since they'd stopped talking.
wow! really good. great character designs throughout! the backgrounds are really good, the bits flow. you have a style that i could really see working on longer pieces. these are almost too good for ink and paper, maybe scan fill in the black backgrounds with computer? this is better than a lot of other people i see on line. good luck!
Playing around with Levels in Photoshop (assuming you have Photoshop). It's under "Image -> Adjustments -> Levels". What Levels does is let you determine the dark ranges, the mid ranges, and the light ranges of the image, and is really good for evening out the types of blacks you have in your comic.
Other programs might have a similar function, but I don't know.
It was funny. I specially loved the big about Vagnor. Although I imagine a lot of people die from "accidental death" wouldn't there be like a place you'd sign in to tell the secretary of hell how you died so they can determine whether you're supposed to be there or not?
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September 20 2007, 01:25:48 UTC 4 years ago
(The second panel of page ten is missing a word!)
September 20 2007, 01:45:36 UTC 4 years ago
and thanks!
September 20 2007, 08:40:01 UTC 4 years ago
Now for the constructive criticism: I'd agree it would look better if the blacks were more solid. And the lettering has a few spots where it looks too obvious that you corrected something, like that really dark in "once" on page 6. Finally, how does fishface know Froggo's name when they say goodbye? Or is he just guessing? Anyhow, these are minor quibbles with another great story. Send these out and see about gettin' them published! You're on to something.
September 21 2007, 00:10:28 UTC 4 years ago
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September 22 2007, 10:14:14 UTC 4 years ago
this is better than a lot of other people i see on line. good luck!
September 22 2007, 17:36:40 UTC 4 years ago
Playing around with Levels in Photoshop (assuming you have Photoshop). It's under "Image -> Adjustments -> Levels". What Levels does is let you determine the dark ranges, the mid ranges, and the light ranges of the image, and is really good for evening out the types of blacks you have in your comic.
Other programs might have a similar function, but I don't know.
September 23 2007, 02:35:30 UTC 4 years ago
keep your shit together :)
September 24 2007, 21:14:37 UTC 4 years ago
Although I imagine a lot of people die from "accidental death" wouldn't there be like a place you'd sign in to tell the secretary of hell how you died so they can determine whether you're supposed to be there or not?
Anonymous
October 8 2007, 18:59:19 UTC 4 years ago
Awesome
It was fuckin hilarious! Great work!October 9 2007, 01:43:55 UTC 4 years ago
Re: Awesome
thanks Mr. Anonymous!