tylerstafford ([info]tylerstafford) wrote,
@ 2007-09-19 18:05:00
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looking at this now I realize that some of the text is sort of hard to read and that the blackened in areas are spotty and uneven. But once they're xeroxed it'll darken up and look better.

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[info]tedprior
2007-09-20 01:25 am UTC (link)
Haha! Nice one!

(The second panel of page ten is missing a word!)

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[info]tylerstafford
2007-09-20 01:45 am UTC (link)
dammit!

and thanks!

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[info]ursulahitler
2007-09-20 08:40 am UTC (link)
LOVE IT! Love every little thing about it.

Now for the constructive criticism: I'd agree it would look better if the blacks were more solid. And the lettering has a few spots where it looks too obvious that you corrected something, like that really dark in "once" on page 6. Finally, how does fishface know Froggo's name when they say goodbye? Or is he just guessing? Anyhow, these are minor quibbles with another great story. Send these out and see about gettin' them published! You're on to something.

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[info]tylerstafford
2007-09-21 12:10 am UTC (link)
Thanks! and yeah the lettering will be gone over and fixed. As far as him knowing his name... uh... they've been standing in line for thousands of years? I think'll add a caption in the first panel on page 11 with somethign about them waiting for countless millenia or something. I never know how to work a characters name into the dialog and have it seem natural to me (if Froggo's name hadn't been in the title you wouldn't have known it until page 5).

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[info]ursulahitler
2007-09-21 12:40 am UTC (link)
Yeah, I think you really need a caption on that "Next please" panel on page 11, to say thousands of years had passed. I see now that it makes sense that a lot of time must've passed for them to get to the front of the line, but it just seemed like a few seconds since they'd stopped talking.

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[info]tiny_monster
2007-09-20 08:47 am UTC (link)
This is really great! I love your character design!

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[info]tylerstafford
2007-09-21 12:16 am UTC (link)
thanks!

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[info]beeblism
2007-09-22 04:24 am UTC (link)
sweet! i like it.

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[info]tylerstafford
2007-09-22 04:25 am UTC (link)
thanks!

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[info]zoot_lives
2007-09-22 08:56 am UTC (link)
Fucking hilarious.

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[info]lookimsorryok
2007-09-22 10:14 am UTC (link)
wow! really good. great character designs throughout! the backgrounds are really good, the bits flow. you have a style that i could really see working on longer pieces. these are almost too good for ink and paper, maybe scan fill in the black backgrounds with computer?
this is better than a lot of other people i see on line. good luck!

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[info]plateoshrimp
2007-09-22 05:36 pm UTC (link)
I liked this a lot.

Playing around with Levels in Photoshop (assuming you have Photoshop). It's under "Image -> Adjustments -> Levels". What Levels does is let you determine the dark ranges, the mid ranges, and the light ranges of the image, and is really good for evening out the types of blacks you have in your comic.

Other programs might have a similar function, but I don't know.

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[info]blackrabbitpix
2007-09-23 02:35 am UTC (link)
funny.
keep your shit together :)

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[info]ihatepeoplealot
2007-09-24 09:14 pm UTC (link)
It was funny. I specially loved the big about Vagnor.
Although I imagine a lot of people die from "accidental death" wouldn't there be like a place you'd sign in to tell the secretary of hell how you died so they can determine whether you're supposed to be there or not?

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Awesome
(Anonymous)
2007-10-08 06:59 pm UTC (link)
It was fuckin hilarious! Great work!

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Re: Awesome
[info]tylerstafford
2007-10-09 01:43 am UTC (link)
thanks Mr. Anonymous!

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